And:



Members: Check out Cat Sith's Challenge:
That is why you should join Zeugma. We're strong enough to help.

For instructions:

Prose writers welcome, too! It's all write . . .

Freewrites

Anything (within reason) goes...

Moderators: Gary, riverwriter, Poetry Moderators

User avatar
Jabberwhacky
Moderator
Posts: 1193
Joined: Sat Mar 18, 2006 12:12 am
Location: San Diego
Contact:

Re: Freewrites

Postby Jabberwhacky » Wed Dec 30, 2009 6:05 am

Interesting. You can start by making the opening line more arresting.

Ravi

User avatar
olson29
Renga Wrangler
Posts: 1280
Joined: Tue Mar 31, 2009 1:02 pm
Location: Aotearoa, California, Louisiana, Florida
[phpBB Debug] PHP Warning: in file [ROOT]/vendor/twig/twig/lib/Twig/Extension/Core.php on line 1236: count(): Parameter must be an array or an object that implements Countable

Re: Freewrites

Postby olson29 » Fri Jan 01, 2010 3:35 am

I have gone into the wilderness

I will never return.
you are poetry

User avatar
olson29
Renga Wrangler
Posts: 1280
Joined: Tue Mar 31, 2009 1:02 pm
Location: Aotearoa, California, Louisiana, Florida
[phpBB Debug] PHP Warning: in file [ROOT]/vendor/twig/twig/lib/Twig/Extension/Core.php on line 1236: count(): Parameter must be an array or an object that implements Countable

Re: Freewrites

Postby olson29 » Sun Jan 03, 2010 12:04 pm

Closer to Heaven, this year will endure with people!
There will not be mistakes, or flaws, it will all fit
In, pure and perfect. Hope will not have an enemy.

We will be more Jesus, with perseverence.

Closer to God, there will be no strangers.
you are poetry

User avatar
olson29
Renga Wrangler
Posts: 1280
Joined: Tue Mar 31, 2009 1:02 pm
Location: Aotearoa, California, Louisiana, Florida
[phpBB Debug] PHP Warning: in file [ROOT]/vendor/twig/twig/lib/Twig/Extension/Core.php on line 1236: count(): Parameter must be an array or an object that implements Countable

Re: Freewrites

Postby olson29 » Thu Jan 07, 2010 9:12 pm

It is the times that I do not feel like praying most,
That I need to pray. It's the same with writing, when
I do not want to write at all, that is when I have to write.
I'm tired, I do not want to write, but I have to get through
This, I can't just do it when I feel like it, I have to do it.
I have been praying while I wa...lk and drive, praying in silence,
Listening. I sing songs of worship, (lift your head, smile.)
I used to be lost, I still am, but my actions reflect my heart
More. I won't publish this, but it takes this to get to the others.
To me that's beautiful. I am not afraid to take the steps, not afraid
To be ugly or wrong, I am alive, still, feel. I breathe and embrace it.
It takes poetry to feel this therapy, a healthy release, more peace,
Merely. I have to keep writing and keep praying, I do not know why;
(Feel your smile in your toes), I need it, like food it allows me to be.
you are poetry

User avatar
olson29
Renga Wrangler
Posts: 1280
Joined: Tue Mar 31, 2009 1:02 pm
Location: Aotearoa, California, Louisiana, Florida
[phpBB Debug] PHP Warning: in file [ROOT]/vendor/twig/twig/lib/Twig/Extension/Core.php on line 1236: count(): Parameter must be an array or an object that implements Countable

Re: Freewrites

Postby olson29 » Sun Jan 10, 2010 9:39 pm

On a beige pathway along the forest river, trees
Breathe, fog glides on distant mountains, moon
Receives. We live on the border, nothing bewteen us.

Bamboo grows outside our window, birds think about
Us. With young hope in your eyes, you feel safer.
We speak about paradox, belief, and what is real.

We heal, here; we do not have to think or be invulnerable.
Yet the jungle-tundra world we exist in, obligates us. We
Must go now, where there is almost too much between us.
you are poetry

User avatar
olson29
Renga Wrangler
Posts: 1280
Joined: Tue Mar 31, 2009 1:02 pm
Location: Aotearoa, California, Louisiana, Florida
[phpBB Debug] PHP Warning: in file [ROOT]/vendor/twig/twig/lib/Twig/Extension/Core.php on line 1236: count(): Parameter must be an array or an object that implements Countable

Re: Freewrites

Postby olson29 » Sun Jan 10, 2010 11:38 pm

Our view is our experience. Can you find reality as it is? not how
You want it to be or how others want it to be? Problems reaarange,
Expectation determines. Do your problems have too much power?

Our view needs to change or else we reaarange our followed problems.
We can - master and profoundly understand our experiences, yes.
I know an arrogant man, that is, unhappy, wherever he was-- he still is.

He has not resolved his expectations. The external controls-- his
Shallow joy and rooted hidden misery. He is not responsible for his own
Energy. If the internal source of suffering is resolved, he will be happy.

If we cannot take responsibility for why we are dissatisfied then we will
Remain dissatisfied wherever we are. The fundamental power I can have
Is in my attitude and my view. Have you really thoroughly hit the bottom

And gone through yourself. Can you sense the journey through yourself?
Within yourself and with the Holy Spirit, find the sources of your suffering
Or it will follow you. A house built on sand is on surface feeling, boredom,

Impatience, lack of perseverence; afraid to be wise. The people who
Build their house on sand are victims, built on moods and how they feel.
What is a real man? A real man is not dominated by anything on earth.

A real man, the man I am and grow to be understands the fear/insecurity
That has caused others before me to be dominated by things and ideas.
He can see through evil and dominating behavior in other men, see

Through those dehumaized by technology, industrialism, and desire.
We have lost some of our own power, how will you take your power back?
The Holy Spirit, whispers and counsels. I learned. I am not afraid, because I am

Soft and kind, hard and wise, vulnerable and protected with more balance. I have
Learned how to surrender and persevere. Many could call me “weak”, yet Those that
Love me understand my strength, undominated, thankful, and humble. I know how I am.

I resolve the persecutors within me and the core within me is more Christ, everyday.
It requires more strength to be more Jesus or more Buddah, or more Muhammed,
Or to sacrifice with faith. It takes more strength to be undominated, to teach, and love.

I have more awareness of my gates and your gates. What can transmit is what exists.
We have all left the garden, cursed or blessed (perception, we choose) to work and give
Birth by the sweat of our brows and sweat of our spirit. We are from Heaven— live closer.
you are poetry

User avatar
olson29
Renga Wrangler
Posts: 1280
Joined: Tue Mar 31, 2009 1:02 pm
Location: Aotearoa, California, Louisiana, Florida
[phpBB Debug] PHP Warning: in file [ROOT]/vendor/twig/twig/lib/Twig/Extension/Core.php on line 1236: count(): Parameter must be an array or an object that implements Countable

Re: Freewrites

Postby olson29 » Wed Jan 13, 2010 12:19 am

American Football is not about being classy.
It's about being a genius savage and excellent execution.
you are poetry

User avatar
olson29
Renga Wrangler
Posts: 1280
Joined: Tue Mar 31, 2009 1:02 pm
Location: Aotearoa, California, Louisiana, Florida
[phpBB Debug] PHP Warning: in file [ROOT]/vendor/twig/twig/lib/Twig/Extension/Core.php on line 1236: count(): Parameter must be an array or an object that implements Countable

Re: Freewrites

Postby olson29 » Fri Jan 15, 2010 11:10 pm

That's so teleport
you are poetry

User avatar
olson29
Renga Wrangler
Posts: 1280
Joined: Tue Mar 31, 2009 1:02 pm
Location: Aotearoa, California, Louisiana, Florida
[phpBB Debug] PHP Warning: in file [ROOT]/vendor/twig/twig/lib/Twig/Extension/Core.php on line 1236: count(): Parameter must be an array or an object that implements Countable

Re: Freewrites

Postby olson29 » Fri Jan 15, 2010 11:24 pm

I'm moving to Florida, you know me, I'm grabbing the bull by the horns and taming it;-)
Im speaking poetry to the female elephant, I could keep going and you know that's real.
I'm full of faith and rowing, exploring and finding new in what I have alreday found.
I'm listening to the songs, not just hearing them, presents in the intangible we already share.
I'm free-thoughts amongst wills, sensing hearts, rather than exteriors; wiser and more beautiful.
you are poetry

User avatar
olson29
Renga Wrangler
Posts: 1280
Joined: Tue Mar 31, 2009 1:02 pm
Location: Aotearoa, California, Louisiana, Florida
[phpBB Debug] PHP Warning: in file [ROOT]/vendor/twig/twig/lib/Twig/Extension/Core.php on line 1236: count(): Parameter must be an array or an object that implements Countable

Re: Freewrites

Postby olson29 » Sat Jan 16, 2010 9:49 pm

In the architecture of fog I stare at what I cannot see.
The indecisive sky darkens. Within my stillness, I quake.
I enter our house and watch fire change shapes in the same
Space. I smell wood burn and hear fire crackle. I return to
Our memories, there is nothing else to hold.
you are poetry

User avatar
olson29
Renga Wrangler
Posts: 1280
Joined: Tue Mar 31, 2009 1:02 pm
Location: Aotearoa, California, Louisiana, Florida
[phpBB Debug] PHP Warning: in file [ROOT]/vendor/twig/twig/lib/Twig/Extension/Core.php on line 1236: count(): Parameter must be an array or an object that implements Countable

Re: Freewrites

Postby olson29 » Sun Jan 17, 2010 1:33 am

Enjoy your linger
you are poetry

User avatar
olson29
Renga Wrangler
Posts: 1280
Joined: Tue Mar 31, 2009 1:02 pm
Location: Aotearoa, California, Louisiana, Florida
[phpBB Debug] PHP Warning: in file [ROOT]/vendor/twig/twig/lib/Twig/Extension/Core.php on line 1236: count(): Parameter must be an array or an object that implements Countable

Re: Freewrites

Postby olson29 » Sun Jan 17, 2010 1:07 pm

Nature makes no mistakes,
Wise and happy people adapt
To life like liquids adapt in nature.
There is a way to get there from here
you are poetry

User avatar
olson29
Renga Wrangler
Posts: 1280
Joined: Tue Mar 31, 2009 1:02 pm
Location: Aotearoa, California, Louisiana, Florida
[phpBB Debug] PHP Warning: in file [ROOT]/vendor/twig/twig/lib/Twig/Extension/Core.php on line 1236: count(): Parameter must be an array or an object that implements Countable

Re: Freewrites

Postby olson29 » Tue Jan 19, 2010 8:55 pm

More understanding
Last edited by olson29 on Tue Feb 22, 2011 4:18 pm, edited 3 times in total.
you are poetry

User avatar
Cat Sith
Renga Wrangler
Posts: 1084
Joined: Mon Dec 26, 2005 2:06 pm
Location: New Jersey, U.S.
[phpBB Debug] PHP Warning: in file [ROOT]/vendor/twig/twig/lib/Twig/Extension/Core.php on line 1236: count(): Parameter must be an array or an object that implements Countable

Re: Freewrites

Postby Cat Sith » Fri Jan 22, 2010 4:30 pm


User avatar
olson29
Renga Wrangler
Posts: 1280
Joined: Tue Mar 31, 2009 1:02 pm
Location: Aotearoa, California, Louisiana, Florida
[phpBB Debug] PHP Warning: in file [ROOT]/vendor/twig/twig/lib/Twig/Extension/Core.php on line 1236: count(): Parameter must be an array or an object that implements Countable

Re: Freewrites

Postby olson29 » Fri Jan 22, 2010 11:20 pm

Hi :)

Hopefully some will be teenagers soon.

Thank you, it means a lot that you point out particular lines


O
you are poetry


[phpBB Debug] PHP Warning: in file [ROOT]/vendor/twig/twig/lib/Twig/Extension/Core.php on line 1236: count(): Parameter must be an array or an object that implements Countable

Return to “General Discussion”

Who is online

Users browsing this forum: No registered users and 6 guests